Wednesday, August 10, 2011

Critique my fight scene please?

Dante and I struck at the same time. I lunged for the head of the beast, Dante struck at the Achilles tendon. The creature roared in rage. I dug my sword into its head a few inches. Red blood poured out. The creature struck me in the gut. The pain was sharp and electric, and I had to take a few ragged breaths. He charged up to me, when dante slit it’s other tendon. It tripped over, which gave me a few seconds to get ready. Once it recovered, it flew up into the air and shot a stream of green fire at me. The man tossed me the sharpened spear he used to try to fend off the beast with. When the daemon prepared for another torrent of fire, I threw the sharpened stick with all my might, and it struck him in the throat. The daemon tried to rip it out, but dante jumped at it, and gave the spear another lunge into its neck. It was dead and bleeding before it hit the ground.

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